tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7659982039332247149.post5894643040709610762..comments2011-04-25T16:53:10.836-07:00Comments on The Lightning Bug: Shades of Gray: Chapter FourteenJP45http://www.blogger.com/profile/10462361605817218192noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7659982039332247149.post-66400529984693342682011-04-09T12:36:24.302-07:002011-04-09T12:36:24.302-07:00Thanks - I tend to write cinematically, and that s...Thanks - I tend to write cinematically, and that scene is one I "saw" that way. It's one of the reasons this book is chopped up into such small chapters.JP45https://www.blogger.com/profile/10462361605817218192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7659982039332247149.post-49736446701450839662011-04-09T06:10:09.913-07:002011-04-09T06:10:09.913-07:00Put a hard return between "I'm just glad ...Put a hard return between "I'm just glad your father folded" and "That night Abby stayed at the Wards' as Jill and Ted went back to his apartment above Stone's." The white space signals a change in location and time in addition to the "that night" transition. <br /><br />Also, hands down the poker scene is my favorite scene in the book so far.CATHERINE ELCIKhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11979542175319735592noreply@blogger.com